This is a very good story.  There is a clear beginning, middle and end to the story.  The beginning started with a sound effect and stated where the story was taking place. 

The author then moved right in to building suspense-leading into the main event.  The author also included an extended ending, which summed up the story and left the reader satisfied.

What worked?:

• Beginning-sound effect and put the main character in the setting
• Great use of suspense-Magic of three technique
• Good use of “Red Flag Phrases”
• Included reactions
• The author included a great description of the giant
• The reader was able to have a picture of the giant in his/her own mind
• The author also included wondering/thinking throughout the main event-this makes the reader wonder as well.
• The author did a wonderful job using “Red Flag Phrases” throughout the main event-this helps transition the reader through the different events happening and gives the story fluency.
• The main event has a mix or action, dialogue, sound effects and wondering.
• Extended ending included a feeling, memory and decision

Suggestions:

• Include a description of the setting after your sound effect beginning.  Comprehensive Narrative Guide – p. 79-81, 88-92.

• Try and use 3 different senses when you are doing the Magic of Three-each hint getting stronger (two were hearing).  Comprehensive Narrative Guide– p. 215-219, 228-235.

• Come up with other word referents that the author could use to refer back to the giant so that the author doesn’t have to keep saying the giant, the giant.  Comprehensive Narrative Guide – p. 220-223.